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PostPosted: Thu Dec 23, 2010 1:33 pm 
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I decided to write a story that doesn't have `shoujo ai` , but it does have a few curses and some very horrific things will happen ( It just wouldn't be alien nine if traumatic things didn't happen), and the Main character is....Different.

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6564098/1/A ... ther_Alien

Its about a new girl that comes in with a bunch of trouble on her tail, though she's kind , nice, and tough, she seems to be hiding a bunch of secrets and wether she will be friend or foe is anyones guess.

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PostPosted: Fri Dec 24, 2010 1:10 am 
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It's actully pretty good and well written, also is [spoiler] Yume fused with a Damare? There your creation, and her symptoms seem to match. [/spoiler]


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PostPosted: Fri Dec 24, 2010 2:32 am 
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Yeah (Plz don't tell the readers....like I just did....Doh!)

But I must tell you that won't be revealed till later in a dramatic way!
though I may put the borgs in more, I'll try. and more megumi and chisa, cause I like Chisa! XD

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PostPosted: Fri Dec 24, 2010 3:29 am 
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Yes, giving all characters a time to shine is allways good, oh and lets not forget Yellowknife, he's still living in Kasumi right?


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PostPosted: Fri Dec 24, 2010 3:40 pm 
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yes, I believe Yume-chan got Po'd about that in the third chapter`observation and trust`, she stated that Kasumi was their top canidate (when is she never!?) But that the Yellow Knives Got to he r first.

I will try and incorporate them as best I can, Oh I added the fourth chapter which I think is pretty informative and gives you the start of the actual plot and suspicion being drawn to Yume and Hana-chan.

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PostPosted: Sat Dec 25, 2010 12:13 am 
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I saw it, I can tell this is leading up to something, also just to say you can use any of my clans in the create a clan thread in any of your stories(infact anyone can use them as long as they give credit) I don't expect you to but I'm just putting it out there.


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PostPosted: Wed Dec 29, 2010 10:43 pm 
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I finally got the 5th chapter done, gratefully its a two part chapter, and the mystery only furthers! This one reveals some more about miss Yume

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Good work on that chapter, I look forward to another update.


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PostPosted: Fri Dec 31, 2010 1:36 am 
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Pretty good fanfic. I like where this is going. I know that it sounds stupid, but is this "White Cloak" Yume by any chance?


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PostPosted: Fri Dec 31, 2010 3:43 am 
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I don't think it sounds stupid! I like to answer anything people ask me, and Yes, "White Cloak" is Yume, which means you can reason out who "Cream Cloak" is no doubt. Though with "Cream Cloak" its not that simple. you'll have to wait till I finish the second part to learn anymore.

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PostPosted: Wed Jan 05, 2011 12:26 pm 
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Part 2 is in now and things only get complicated as Yume and her friends begin to start to build tension between them and the Drill, Note this chapter may be more violence and contains Main character beatings that may make you hate Yume more. Plz enjoy!

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PostPosted: Wed Jan 05, 2011 2:17 pm 
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Well that was pretty good, you have gotten me curiose, and I'm happy you actully used one of my clans, I created them so people could use them in stories, is it going to turn the train into a giant robot?


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PostPosted: Wed Jan 05, 2011 9:44 pm 
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unfortunately no......Yume programed it to crash into the next train station so that it would explode and take out some spaceships.....I wonder if anyone knew what Yume meant with that `first` comment.... I personally like how Akira and Hana turned out though.
(':sakura:')

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I'm not sure what she meant but I hope to see soon, but how did she program the Jet? Jet's may be cyborg's that fuse with mechines but there brains are completely organic underneath it all, so you can't really program one.


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PostPosted: Wed Jan 05, 2011 10:42 pm 
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I kinda figured no one would get what she meant.....and I don't think you would want to see her do it either.....She basically threatend to rape Yuri, that's what she meant by `first` cause Yuri's a virgin.....and she used an overdose of S.C.L.S on the Jet to control it ( I'll explain overdosing effects in one chapter sometime).

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